My First Single!

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J-malice

PRODUCER ALMIGHTY!!
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im workin on an album to get some publicity...im not tryin to get signed im startin my own label so im jus tryna establish a buzz in my area first(fayetteville North Carolina). anyway this is my first single
"Shoot Dem Up" it has a dancehall vybe to it cuz i gotta keep it real wit culture. but shit i attempted to rhyme off the same word the whole way thru and i did it. took me about 2 months to write da damn song but i finally got the shit.

my reason for postin this is i need to know if there is anything i should fix b4 i try to get it some rotation at the stations. besides the obvious editin out of the curse words. but yea ANY suggestion is appreciated.

Criticize hard! i need to know the littlest thing. thanx

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ill o.g.
represnting the high school kids of NY:

Yo, thats a HOT beat man, i could see people dancin to, i dont even know what you are sayin, but it sounds cool, the hook is HOT, but i dont know if the "gangstas" will accept this but i think all the girls will LOVE this....
 
ill o.g.
represnting the high school kids of NY:

Yo, thats a HOT beat man, i could see people dancin to it, i dont even know what you are sayin, but it sounds cool, the hook is HOT, but i dont know if the "gangstas" will accept this but i think all the girls will LOVE this....
 

J-malice

PRODUCER ALMIGHTY!!
ill o.g.
yea i heard dat. i was tryna decide if i was gonna go wit culture or gangsta for my first single. i decided culture, but im workin on a shoot dem up remix and that one is hard. "nigga run when you see me dont take the chance/ we still shootin em up, but this one aint the dance" so the remix is on my regula gangsta shit. ima put that one out right after this one dependin on how good it does with the stations. if it gets big locally then ima put the remix out so niggas dont get the wrong impression. yea thanx for that big.

are the vocals clear enough?
 
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rise9

Guest
yo that track is pretty hot. i like the feel to it. hook is off the hook, nice club track. checked it at work thou so i couln't check the levels.
 

J-malice

PRODUCER ALMIGHTY!!
ill o.g.
Originally posted by afriquedeluxe
whoa!!! world play crazy n beat is hot! nice work man. one of da dopest rapaz here at illmuzik 4 sho.
hey u still rockin da triton?

thanx man i apprecicte dat. yea im still on that triton (shits kinda gets me mad sometimes), and cool edit.


Originally posted by rise9
yo that track is pretty hot. i like the feel to it. hook is off the hook, nice club track. checked it at work thou so i couln't check the levels.

good lookin out. whenever you getta chance to check the levels holla at me. im most worried about the bass im not sure if it hits hard enough or if it hits too soft.
 

berserk

Monster Music
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Battle Points: 33
completely incredible... should really be in showcase... but still... the beat is mad... like you said the rappin off the same word... griiimey... haha... yeah... hook is ill... for a commercial track it should perhaps be repeated like 38 times more... great work... if you don't get signed... then i will eat a sock...

9.8/10
 

berserk

Monster Music
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Battle Points: 33
^^nobody's perfect... and i always wanted to know what that word at the end is... cos dj's always use it... is it booooollaaaa? what does that mean exdacylu?
 

J-malice

PRODUCER ALMIGHTY!!
ill o.g.
LOLOLOL its pull up. its a reggae thing. you know how in reggae back in the day they used to say reeeewwwwinnnnddd. welll now the word changed from rewind to pull up. (i think elephant man made up the phrase a couple years ago) but yea its puuuuuuulll uuuuuppp.
 

berserk

Monster Music
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Battle Points: 33
haha aight cool... now i know what it means i'm a happy man... puuuuuuulllll upppppppppp.....
 

StressWon

www.stress1.com
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Battle Points: 68
Hey J,

From one MC to another,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,


Hot man! Ya got that club sound goin and thats whats out there these days man,,,go do you man! Ya got my full support!!! I got some beats I'm gonna finish up on and I know you could rock, so I'll be in touch,,,,I still wanna get this Illmuzik MC joint goin(All mcees from illmuzik on one joint) Holla,,,,
 
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Crate Raider

Guest
your delivery/flow was insane....you rode the shit outta that beat....u west indian btw???
 

Freakwncy

IllMuzik Moderator
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yo. mad nice... vocal were tight and level i think may be a little loud, but that could be me...overall tight... i like how you rode those trumpet...and had them following you... nice hook... i would to to see a hard cut slice in the middle as a breakdown, to let the pple know you're serious and not a club.... but like i said overall tight.
 
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