A beat for an intense/emotional song about mental health...

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BiggChev

ILLIEN
Battle Points: 11
The use of chinas/splashes/rides is great. Not sounds you hear in typical hip-hop beats.

That clipping kick has sooo much character/meat/phatness...but maybe not for this tune? For me a boomy kick that matches the verbed out snare would go much further in encapsulating the rock vibe of this tune. Shit, maybe even lifting the Levee Breaks, break, would fit.

This definitely a left-field beat. I like the elements, but not the sum of them. I think a dope Def Jux era rapper could really do something great on this beat, but there's a cohesion that's missing.

EDIT: having listened back several times now, I kinda like the lack of cohesion. There's a disjointed, unsettling nature to the track that I think does have that "emotional" quality you mentioned.

Heavy K's Choice vibes here.
 

Dusty B

ILLIEN
Battle Points: 37
The use of chinas/splashes/rides is great. Not sounds you hear in typical hip-hop beats.

That clipping kick has sooo much character/meat/phatness...but maybe not for this tune? For me a boomy kick that matches the verbed out snare would go much further in encapsulating the rock vibe of this tune. Shit, maybe even lifting the Levee Breaks, break, would fit.

This definitely a left-field beat. I like the elements, but not the sum of them. I think a dope Def Jux era rapper could really do something great on this beat, but there's a cohesion that's missing.

EDIT: having listened back several times now, I kinda like the lack of cohesion. There's a disjointed, unsettling nature to the track that I think does have that "emotional" quality you mentioned.

Heavy K's Choice vibes here.
Thanks so much for the feedback and multiple listen. Really appreciate you digging into it and carefully listening to the emotion I was trying to get across. Thank you!
 
I think at 1.20 to 1.32 is overkill on the distortion ‘crash bang wallop’ however that could be you expressing something musically from the emotional / mental health topic and theme.

Other than that, love the creativity and that vocal cover is great! Dope acoustic guitar.
 
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